Chapter 5 Conversational Revision Posted

I have typed up the new ending to Rome and Labriella’s argument in chapter 5, and reposted the chapter as “Touchy Relationship.”

Instead of centering around Rome’s desperation, I have refocused the argument’s resolution around the REAL problem: the definition of a relationship. Rome thinks he has given enough of himself; Labriella feels like she is the only one giving. Why? Because Labriella is thinking in terms of relationship vs. enslavement, and Rome is thinking in terms of rutting vs. mating; they are definitely not on the same page. Rome’s increasing paranoia about Labriella walking away from him again begins to show, as does Labriella’s insecurity about herself being enough to keep Rome’s interest. In the end, Labriella makes an important discovery that may be the turning of the tide in the relationship between her and Rome.

Don’t worry; I haven’t forgotten about the plot bunnies! They should be only a chapter or two away. šŸ˜‰

In the meantime, I’m going to reread some of my work to make sure I keep the consistency of tone; I think I’m getting dangerously close to OOCing or rabbit trailing.

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